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chunky
10-02-2012, 12:29 PM
i have been working a lot lately so i dont have much time to work on my music so today was my day off i recorded this and edited the video with footage ive had saved up for the last year.
i'd like to re make it with a girl helping me so i can have more footage that goes along with the lyrics but for now i just put scenery while driving to take up the parts i dont have film for yet.

try not to be too harsh just tell me what u rate it 1-10 on video and sound and editing..
im really not that good at editing its one of my first times but im working on it if u know anything that could help me let me know

i rushed through it today just cuz i wanted to have it somewhat finished even tho its not completely how i want it.

[/URL][url]http://youtu.be/T3EwNwaKAEY (http://youtu.be/T3EwNwaKAEY)

Popwar Pill
10-02-2012, 12:57 PM
LOL

a

Gunz
10-02-2012, 01:03 PM
LOL

a
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0n a scale of 1-10 I'd give you a 1. And no, I'm not being harsh.

Video = boring
Lyrics = dull (from what I could hear)
Sound = awful, your levels are all fucked up, too much instrumental, not enough vocals...although maybe thats a good thing :-P

Seems like you have fun making it so dont let me rain on your parade, but seriously that pretty much sucked.

Oh ya and it's 'critique' not 'critic'

Lawyered.

Popwar Pill
10-02-2012, 01:05 PM
We can hear you running out of breath and when you breathe.

Gunz
10-02-2012, 01:08 PM
"Chocolate Rain" Original Song by Tay Zonday - YouTube (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EwTZ2xpQwpA)

:23 gives you a sweet tip on how to fix the breathing thing.

Popwar Pill
10-02-2012, 01:34 PM
http://www.youtube.com/watch?NR=1&v=pVDihFkmiuM&feature=endscreen

Oh my god just stop

chunky
10-02-2012, 01:35 PM
well thanks for being honest
if u were making it with the same lyrics and instrumental what would u film ?
ya i know my breath is loud, i thought it would sound better doing it all in one take rather than recording different layers to make it so i don't run out of breath.

Gunz
10-02-2012, 01:46 PM
http://www.youtube.com/watch?NR=1&v=pVDihFkmiuM&feature=endscreen (http://www.youtube.com/watch?NR=1&v=pVDihFkmiuM&feature=endscreen)

Oh my god just stop

Ya that was pure torture on so many levels.

MartyRules
10-02-2012, 01:53 PM
http://www.youtube.com/watch?NR=1&v=pVDihFkmiuM&feature=endscreen (http://www.youtube.com/watch?NR=1&v=pVDihFkmiuM&feature=endscreen)

Oh my god just stop
How does one flow so bad with a song? It's like he just starting talking recorded it and needed a beat so he listed a bunch on the wall and threw a dart and just went with it. Not to mention lame everything else about it

xninjadude03
10-02-2012, 02:14 PM
The lyrics are alright, nothing exceptional but it's better than some rappers with ice cream cones tattooed on their face. The flow could definitely use work (too white?) and the video editing looks like someone scrolling though their phone camera.

Popwar Pill
10-06-2012, 12:10 PM
Haha what a faggot set all of them to private.

-Element-
10-06-2012, 05:20 PM
Haha what a faggot set all of them to private.

that fuckin pissed me off! i wanted to see them because of how bad people made it out to be, i need a laugh!