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Skateselect
01-09-2011, 04:36 PM
what the title says. the first one is from a little more than a week ago, and the second is from today

YouTube - A to B (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aLYIFYPnMQE)

YouTube - Headache (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XqRF4n-UUxo&feature=player_embedded)

codycantskate
01-09-2011, 05:24 PM
I liked em bolth

Skateselect
01-09-2011, 05:50 PM
had to edit the first post, i uploaded a very slightly different version, which was the one i wanted. the only difference is the timing of the last chord

KingofBluntz
01-09-2011, 06:20 PM
Both were good but I liked the first one more

Skateselect
01-09-2011, 06:38 PM
Both were good but I liked the first one more
first one definitely has more structure to it

Skateselect
01-11-2011, 07:14 PM
any more opinions? id really like some suggestions on how to improve

Skateselect
01-11-2011, 08:10 PM
god dammit you guys, i cant make better stuff without constructive criticism

drizzle
01-13-2011, 06:32 PM
somebody likes their tremolo and flangers....


i listened to A to B. pretty decent. add some drums and some reverb-drenched apathetic vocals and you''ll have a sweet song

Skateselect
01-14-2011, 05:06 PM
somebody likes their tremolo and flangers....


i listened to A to B. pretty decent. add some drums and some reverb-drenched apathetic vocals and you''ll have a sweet song
haha my dad bought me an effects pedal for christmas, i was trying all sorts of stuff out

Punkatoo
01-14-2011, 05:44 PM
get some sort of percussion in there. nothing that would really make the song sound "hard" cuz they're both nice and quiet songs, but something that would give it a little more structure.

drizzle
01-14-2011, 08:12 PM
its what takes any boring not-punk song and makes it into a good song.

Chump Champ
01-14-2011, 08:15 PM
You got a lot going for the first song, the part on top could stand to be cleaner and have more flow, overall I think that's what the whole thing would benefit from, more flow, less chop. That being said, I like a melody you were finding towards the beginning, mess around with that more.